Awesome! Maybe, you could have used an ellipses after “We thought we were going to die” to add more effect to the story (but maybe some more detail about how you were feeling while you were in the water.)It could be even better!
Is there a meaning behind your story? I think there is. “We had now learnt our lesson not to go out alone.” Anyway your story is verry short and it is full of detail. Well Done.:)
Awesome! Maybe, you could have used an ellipses after “We thought we were going to die” to add more effect to the story (but maybe some more detail about how you were feeling while you were in the water.)It could be even better!
Tiana, I had used more then 100 words so I couldn’t add more detail .
Good work Emerson – really good vocabulary. 🙂
Is there a meaning behind your story? I think there is. “We had now learnt our lesson not to go out alone.” Anyway your story is verry short and it is full of detail. Well Done.:)