That was awesomely cool Haleemah! The vocabulary you have used is unimaginable and the way you have presented it is fabulous. This should get published into a real book. I will so want to read it. Well done and keep up the good work.
This piece of work is pulling me to it. It is so interesting I felt as if I was actually in that scene. If that was published into a real book I would love to read th rest of the book. I like your vocabulary a lot and the choice of the scene. I think you can improve on your scentence starters because most of them start with the.
OMG! That is soo cool! The vocabulary you have used is incredible! KEEP IT UP!
That was awesomely cool Haleemah! The vocabulary you have used is unimaginable and the way you have presented it is fabulous. This should get published into a real book. I will so want to read it. Well done and keep up the good work.
I agree
Thanks
WOW! That’s just amanzing!
Wow!
Great story!
I liked it so much.
Well, it did take a very long time.
wow that was good!!!
Thank you
wow that was a great story so how do you like doing tat kind of stuff
Well, with a little help, it turns into a masterpiece!
This piece of work is pulling me to it. It is so interesting I felt as if I was actually in that scene. If that was published into a real book I would love to read th rest of the book. I like your vocabulary a lot and the choice of the scene. I think you can improve on your scentence starters because most of them start with the.
WOW Haleemah! I quite liked the part where you wrote a few notes of the piano down. I also liked the incredible vocab ulaury you added.
I meant vocabulary.
Thank you