I love the idea of all the tools in the shed jumping around! You’ve got a cracking imagination there, Zeba! Just watch your sentence starters – you’ve got lots of sentences starting with “I”.
Keep up with the great writing!
I love your 100 word challenge! It’s funny how the tools jumped out. I think this might need publishing as a real book swell. I think you have put a lot of effort in this. Well done!
I love the idea of all the tools in the shed jumping around! You’ve got a cracking imagination there, Zeba! Just watch your sentence starters – you’ve got lots of sentences starting with “I”.
Keep up with the great writing!
I will make sure next time.
I love your 100 word challenge! It’s funny how the tools jumped out. I think this might need publishing as a real book swell. I think you have put a lot of effort in this. Well done!
You have really thought of your sentences Zeba. I love the way they are all jumping around that made me laugh! KEEP IT UP!
Well Done. I like the way you have written it in first person. Fantastic work.
Dear Zeba,
I really enjoyed your 100WC as it was very imaginative and a different way of writing about a piano.
I agree with your teacher in that you should use different sentence starters.
Well done.
Mr Foster – Shrewsbury International School Bangkok
http://blogs.shrewsbury.ac.th/year4blog
I will be really extra careful with my sentence starters next time. Thank you for commenting.
THANKS FOR ALL THE COMMENTS!