Fantastic entry Abdulhaadi, well done! You set the scene well and used good vocabulary to convey a feeling in the house. Good use of capital letters as well although you missed one on I towards the end.
I really liked the spooky twist at the end.
Fantastic job building the suspense throughout your piece and setting the scene so well. It is clear that you have a very creative imagination. I would suggest that you review your use of punctuation. I would love for you develop this piece and add to it.
Keep on writing!
Hi Abdulhaadi,
Fantastic entry Abdulhaadi, well done! You set the scene well and used good vocabulary to convey a feeling in the house. Good use of capital letters as well although you missed one on I towards the end.
I really liked the spooky twist at the end.
Fantastic Abdulhadi, you created lots of suspence and even compared the music to mum and dad to find out who was playing it.
Fantastic job building the suspense throughout your piece and setting the scene so well. It is clear that you have a very creative imagination. I would suggest that you review your use of punctuation. I would love for you develop this piece and add to it.
Keep on writing!
I like you 100 word challenge.
wow! you did a great job for the 100 word challenge!
this is different ,i love it (=