I really like the way that you said he was unconsious and then he woke up and saw the moon. Well Done!
Randeep you should have put a few pictures on it. But apart from that I really liked your story! I agree with Humayrah about the part when he was unconsious – that was a really good idea!:D
Humayrah – I’m sorry if wrote your name wrong:)
Well done Randeep. 🙂 That is a brilliant piece of writing. 🙂
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I really like the way that you said he was unconsious and then he woke up and saw the moon. Well Done!
Randeep you should have put a few pictures on it.
But apart from that I really liked your story! I agree with Humayrah about the part when he was unconsious – that was a really good idea!:D
Humayrah – I’m sorry if wrote your name wrong:)
Well done Randeep. 🙂 That is a brilliant piece of writing. 🙂