Sara,
You’ve used some fantastic powerful verbs here, such as awaited, to build tension. It leaves me wondering what will happen next.
Keep up the great work!
This is a very exciting piece of writing which definitely leaves the reader wanting to know more.
It’s quite a scary piece actually as the children are clearly smart, and they think they are safe but as the reader, you have let us know how wrong they are!
Wow! I really like this writing for your 100 word challenge as it’s exciting and I really want to know what happens next. Also you have used a lot of powerful words and adjectives. Keep it up Sarah.
Sara,
You’ve used some fantastic powerful verbs here, such as awaited, to build tension. It leaves me wondering what will happen next.
Keep up the great work!
This is a very exciting piece of writing which definitely leaves the reader wanting to know more.
It’s quite a scary piece actually as the children are clearly smart, and they think they are safe but as the reader, you have let us know how wrong they are!
A real page turner.
You have a good story and a awesome ending. Well done!!
It is a very good story I hope you had a good time reading this story! 🙂
Well done you put a lot of effort in this peice of writing it really wants me to carry on reading this fantastic story.
Wow! I really like this writing for your 100 word challenge as it’s exciting and I really want to know what happens next. Also you have used a lot of powerful words and adjectives. Keep it up Sarah.
Wow Sara you really did a good job and now all you have to do is keep it up.
It’s a very good story. It ends on a cliff hanger:)!
Thank you