Improvements!

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7 Responses to Improvements!

  1. Mrs Waldrum says:

    Well done! You have kept me interested and I want to read on, be proud!

  2. Mrs Boydon says:

    Great use of technical vocabulary in your introduction! This really showcases your fantastic writing skills – a fantastic variety of sentence starters and I loved “tears choked at my throat”!
    Very well done.

  3. 15mjibreel says:

    You have really made an improvement on your writing! These are very good sentences.

  4. 16zibrahim says:

    Zainab, that was an amazing intro. I want to read on!

  5. 16zahmed says:

    Fantastic work! Well done.

  6. 16mnagem says:

    Great work. I have never seen a brilliant story like that. I LOVE IT

  7. 16smohamed says:

    That was fab I loved it it’s exiting very powerful and u have improved because I know keep up the good wor

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