I agree with you Humayrah. Your story was great, you have great description in there and you have made me picture the whole story.The vocabulary you have used is great. I don’t think you need to improve on anything. 🙂
Hi Maria,
We loved your piece of work! It was very creative and not much wrong about it. The only mistake we could find was that you forgot to put the apostrophes before the ‘s’ in the name ‘Mark’. Overall your work was great and we hope that many people would enjoy your post just like we have. Please can you visit our blog aswell at: http://year6.stpaulswoodgreen.net/
From Jade and Dersane
Hi Maria,
I really liked your work, the bit when you said the alien was so cute was really funny. After Mark has a aprostaphe just remember that! You can visit our blog at http://www.year6.stpaulswoodgreen.net!
I really like your story Maria. You really described your story well. Maybe next time try not to rush it at the ends.:)
Thank you for commenting.
I agree with you Humayrah. Your story was great, you have great description in there and you have made me picture the whole story.The vocabulary you have used is great. I don’t think you need to improve on anything. 🙂
Hi Maria,
We loved your piece of work! It was very creative and not much wrong about it. The only mistake we could find was that you forgot to put the apostrophes before the ‘s’ in the name ‘Mark’. Overall your work was great and we hope that many people would enjoy your post just like we have. Please can you visit our blog aswell at:
http://year6.stpaulswoodgreen.net/
From Jade and Dersane
Hi Maria,
I really liked your work, the bit when you said the alien was so cute was really funny. After Mark has a aprostaphe just remember that! You can visit our blog at http://www.year6.stpaulswoodgreen.net!
From Tish and Jessica